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Along you came by ~SatansSporn:iconSatansSporn:

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The brutality of my past
Remained under lock and key
There it was meant to stay
For all eternity
It was never meant to be freed by you
Or anybody else
But along you came
Unlocked the door
Unleashed the horror never seen before
No body needed to know
Not even you
So why did you do this to me why couldnt you leave it?
Couldn't you see it hurt me so badly
Thats before I gave you my heart gladly
You forced me to tell you
Through all of the tears
U just had to unleash my darkest fears
You've brought back the memories
I wish I didn't have
Now I can no longer feel happy
I can't get rid of this pain
You thought your life was far worse than mine
Until you unlocked the door to my reality
You said yourself it was plain brutaility
But the worst pain of all
Thats worse than my actual past
Was the fact that it was you
That dug it all up
©2004-2009 ~SatansSporn
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about a certin somebody who I will not mention, who opened up my past and hurt me like hell

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~soccersweetee89 Apr 20, 2004, 7:53:18 AM
awwwww come here *gives hug* im sorry this poem is really good I really like it I like how it expresses your hurt emotions its really good I love it +fav
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~SatansSporn Apr 20, 2004, 8:01:30 AM
thankyou very much :) It's a bit jumbled up really but thats what I think makes it good coz it's coming from my heart and my emotions... :hug: bak
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~Darkside915 Apr 20, 2004, 9:26:13 PM
Woah very intense.... :cries: Darkside hopes you feel better real soon :hug: :glomp: :hug: :glomp: Great poem though, even if its so sad :crying: Very well written and nice flow too. Another fantastic piece:!: :nod: But..but..but :tears: Darkside wish he could do something to make you feel better >.<; <--- he ish so useless *clings to you*

--
Never say Forever,
because Forever only lasts as long as right now.
In a minute.
A second.
A single solitary moment.
Forever can so easily turn into Yesterday.
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~UnLoVeDpOeT Apr 20, 2004, 11:24:50 PM
:sadangel: Aww this is really powerful.
"Thats before I gave you my heart gladly" the use of gladly just feels a little bit forced to me, but other then that you're feelings are very well expressed through this, Hope life gets better for you! :hug:

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** I could look you in the eyes and pretend**
**I could look you in the eyes and say i'm fine**
**I could lie everyday and say everythings okay**
**But the truth remains the same**
**It never stops hurting**
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~SatansSporn Apr 21, 2004, 1:37:07 AM
*clings bak* thanks again darkside me wuv u :)
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~WildFire-FlameWood Apr 21, 2004, 4:19:40 AM
Hey Hell, since evry1 else has sed nice stuff about this i feel abliged 2 say a few not so nice, the rhymin is bad, the words unrefined an i've probably sed this b4 but u need serious help if this is how it really is, but other than that it gud, the emotion is just right, powerful an raw, a thumbs up but not a +fave :)
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~SatansSporn Apr 21, 2004, 6:43:07 AM
:) comments always appreciated good or bad
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